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Nervously sitting in the theater chair,
     Holding my popcorn not knowing what else to do.
Sitting here, awkwardly looking beside me, at you.
              I'm still new to this whole dating scene;
My stomach fills with butterflies...Or perhaps that's my spleen.
                        I never did well at anatomy; all I know is I'm scared
How do I act? How do I know if you care?

          You look at me and smile in that side-way grin of yours
But I look away, bashful, and instead admire the floor.
                  Look at all the popcorn and trash—who cleaned?
When is the movie going to start? Oh wait, it's not even six-thirty.
          Why did we come so early? That's right so we could talk;
But now we're here and I've got nothing. My mind has suddenly been replaced by chalk.
                  Or something like that. I didn't ask you to judge.


You clear your throat, shift in your chair, and my body stiffens
          Accidentally, of course. That's right—I'm brave;
If you put your arm over my shoulders, the night might be saved.
               But you don't. We don't touch. We don't talk. We just stare
At the blank screen. Wondering, thinking...do you even care?
      I swear the dating scene should come with a book;
Of what to expect and if there is a certain look.

Maybe if I reach over and take your hand, would that be weird?
             Perhaps if I look at you like this, you can read my mind,
And know that I like you, I do! So do something before we run out of time!
        Just touch me somehow, make it intimate in someway!
Anything, to make me know I am doing okay...but maybe I am not.
              Are you disappointed? Am I fool? Has this night been thwarted?
What have I done? What can I do? When has dating turned everyone to fools?

We look at each other, this time we don't look away.
               Your mouth begins to open like you got something to say.
I raise my eyebrows in that questioning look, but you close your mouth;
       We're silent. I really have no idea what this is all about.
For a hopeless romantic, I'm sure dumb when it comes to this--
                 Tonight is definitely not going to end with one small kiss;
Which is probably good because I'd mess that up too.

How do I get through to you? How do I know where this is going to lead?
             What at this moment am I supposed to believe?
That's it! I quit. I'll say what I mean! I'll tell you I want you,
      I like you, please say you like me too!
I open my mouth; the previews begin to roll;
                Wasted all that time and still stuck with no place to go.
And we're there making fun of the previews

        We have similar taste I see; you laugh at things
That I think are funny. That's cool, right? That means something...right?
                 Or not. I am thinking too much again
And perhaps this date means nothing. Perhaps we'll just be friends
      Ah, figures. This is what always happens to me
For a romantic, I think I can say
                              I've flunked out of this dating game.
whoo hoo!!! Well I've written about My First Kiss....and well I really liked where that turned out...
So I attempted the sorta thing thing with "My First Date" I was going to add more to it...
And it was going to be this epically messed up, everything goes wrong kind of deal...
I dunno. I might add more to it....


Or someone can write a reply from the guys perspective. ahaha That could be a blasty. LoL
Do eeeet!


Anyway. -coughs-
I think I might enter this in Fluttering's new contest...for humor....

But I dunno if this is humorous enough so I might wait. ^^


Let me know what you guys think!


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missamerica0612 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I can picture this happning to me on my first date.. im very.. sheltered at home .. so i get really nervous when im actually allowed to be close to a guy.. of cours i am only 14...
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FlooffyEars Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Student General Artist
Wow. This describes my first date better than anything. It was JUST like this. Literally.
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Clo-LOL-Dev Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2011  Hobbyist
I bet you this will happen on my first date!! It's goiing to happen!!! :D
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muskaan786 Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
this is wayyy too cute...love it!
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lindsaaaay Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2010
this reminds me of the same exact thing that happened to me,
thinking too much, wondering what to do, begging for a sign,
i absolutely love this. (:
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avenge-my-ghost666 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2010
OMG i love this poem!
this will definitely happen to me on my first date =S
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Nymeria13shades Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2009
oh my GAWD you portrayed this so perfectly i found myself nodding along. its just how i expirienced such a situation, amazing! unbelievabel true :wow:
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K-ayu Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Awww, this was cute :love: It's funny because my boyfriend and I have been together for quite a while, and yet, we're just going on our first date tomorrow. Lol. Life is strange like that :XD:
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Lil-Drummer-Boy Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2009  Student Writer
Wow all the emotion in this poem, all the thoughts reflects almost perfectly how I feel and what I think but on a bigger scale; instead of it being the 1st date (or any date for that matter) its how I feel everyday, every second with the whole relationship I have with the girl I love...we aren't exactly a couple but I have almost all the benefits of being her boyfriend without the title and she tells me she loves me but each day I wonder if I'm doing everything right, if she is "in-love" with me as I am with her, if she's waiting for me to make a move or deciding when she's ready to make the move herself, so many questions go through my mind about her and "us" and this poem is like a shortened, isolated version of them...
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PencilandPaperGirl Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2009
HAHAHA this is exactly how I felt on my first date, and i feel relieved reading this sense I'm going on my first date with a guy i like today. THANK YOU!
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hidngfrommyescpe Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2008
it actually made me think, of how a person, or a friends, could even grab your hand in a situation like that, and mean so much, it made me smile, but i was hopeing it was going somewhere in the end, but it just ends, and thats it. buetiful way of ending it.
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Listen-To-The-Music Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2008
haha this is amazing! i love it =D <3
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lpfanxtreme Featured By Owner May 11, 2008
I know what you mean by being kind of "lost" when it comes to making moves... I'm a guy, and in my first relationship, I wasn't the one leading... >_< This is well-written! Definitely brings memories back for me...
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Mattiello Featured By Owner May 1, 2008  Professional Writer
I have featured this in journal! Check it out.
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lullednightmare Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2008
awhh, definitely cute X] I can definitely say a lot of people probably feel that way about their first dates :XD: lol
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Ether-Angel Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2008
Hey there :) I love this, great job, and its so funny and sweet, you really get the feeling I think everyone can relate to, kinda makes you feel like you're there.
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DreamerzSonata7 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2008
This tottally reminds me of my first date! It was so amazingly akward. =] You did an amazing job in capturing the akwardness. ^.^
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sexy-spartan117 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2008
omg, this describes my night last night EXACTLY!!!! (except for the last stanza)

AMAZING!!!
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tyrant600 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2008
Ah thats happened to me lol. this is a very very well written poem. Its exactly how I remembered it hahah
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hopelesswithhope Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Lol. A feeling so many, many people can relate to and you've written it so perfectly. =D Awesome job.
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citrush2o Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2008
You should try courting, it's a little more rewarding...er, accidental rhyme :aww:
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duckgirl566 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2008   Writer
wow. you're the reason i love this kind of poetry.

=DDD
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GabrielAlesandrien Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2008
It's wonderful, cassy. :D
I hope your first date really will be like this and mush more.
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:iconmattiello:
Mattiello Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008  Professional Writer
It's interesting how people start thinking about things that don't really matter, like anatomy. You do it just to keep yourself calm. Good job!
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leonlinnea Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
I love this, all of it feels so true to what a really happens to a person on a first date. I find it very humorous, but very realistic as well, and the questions add such a nice touch to the piece that you really get a sense of how some dates in reality go.
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WoodenPress Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
Ah, I like this. My favorite bit:

"That's right so we could talk;
But now we're here and I've got nothing. My mind has suddenly been replaced by chalk.
Or something like that."

I still get like that sometime with my boyfriend of over a year. Chalk...I feel all the feelings but my words go down the faucet, flushed. Ai! It makes me ill.
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ShadowWolf3117 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008
An excellent sequel to your 'First Kiss' poem, although technically it should come before it =P

Good job. ^-^
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doorfromheaven Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2008
Shhhhhh! So I am going backwards...besides it's not the same characters in each of the poems. haha :glomp:

But thank you. ^^ -snugs-
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ShadowWolf3117 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2008
Aaah. Makes much sense. XD

Welcome! ^-^ :hug:
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annafisha Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2008   Writer
it's very sweet..great job..:D
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something44 Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2008
I find this very sweet. Everybody has experienced something like this when they had their first dates. Very well written I might say! Love the imagery on how the awkwardness is being portrayed. Good job! :thumbsup:
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Kantoken Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
Wow! You did an amazing job (again), it's exactly how these things go!

There is nothing to add. Amazing. :thumb81529161:
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MoogleyBacon Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
Wow, Passie! You really caught the essence of the dating scene perfectly here. :D I love this. <3

My first date went exactly like that, too... it was weird. o.o; I don't think the fact we were seeing V for Vendetta helped. XD Only mine did end with a kiss, so something went right. ^^;
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Ritsuzen Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
I finished the male perspective. [link]

Thanks for being awesome!
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whisperinthetrees Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
Sounds like fun...
I like this. The awkwardness is portrayed perfectly.
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lovemeethate Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008  Student Writer
awe. that's so cute. :D :D
i love this one!!!!!
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:iconritsuzen:
Ritsuzen Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
I'm writing the boy part, if that's ok. It IS fun, and I might even finish it someday. It, of course, isn't as completely flawless as yours, but you can look forward to it in the future?

Tell me if you don't want me to do it and I'll stop.
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de-pace Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
that is so... wow.

:heart:

flawlessly written, my dear :aww:
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soslovinsungirl Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
aww, dear God i can relate to this so well, you pulled off the akwardness and innocence of a first date beautifully
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clo-1991 Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008  Professional Traditional Artist
Never had a proper first daye, but I could just imagine one going something like that. Doesn't need anymore added, its brill already ^^
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lilywish Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
Haha, lovely. :heart: Charmingly sweet, how two awkward people find happiness under the pressure of 'first date'.

As for adding more goes, I like it the way it is. (: But of course thats just me
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BrandNewWorld Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
WOW nice :D love it

Well all I have to say those stares are nice:(

I kinda skipped that phase :():
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almalobana Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008   Writer
this is great, i can relate to that it reminds me of my first date with my first bf.

great job :)
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Hylianinja Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2008
I really liked this! I had to read it more than once! :3 I can really relate to the whole 'unsure about what to do' feeling in a moment like that. I hate feeling that way.

Good job! :)
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