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To Love--
         Burning grievance of a dying heart; ALONE.
Sacred aching of possession and need; declaration of OWN.
                     Forbidden rules of an ancient game of fight and pride
       To win an honor and call another soul by the name of MINE.

To Love--
              Maneuvers through the deceit of shadow and time;
Standstill for the sake of aging and the war raged against MIND.
                              Distance is not a boundary but you're running is a CRIME;
               Lay down a heavy head and be silenced by my DREAMS.

To Love--
               Speak not in the riddles of a long ago era of past and FUTURE;
Do we live in the there or the then? But what about the NOW?
                         Your heart. My heart. Beating in relation to one another. But HOW?
          If you cannot speak the answer, then don't speak at all.

To Love--
              Show me the desirable dance of greed and DISASTER.
I hear it is beautiful when done by the spotlight of the STARS;
                    When the moon lectures of forbidden arts and we're speeding,
         Through the night like stealth and luxurious CARS.

To Love--
              Break my heart a thousand times over like beads of SAND;
Push me down like the monster inside I truly am.
                    May your lips linger upon mine for just a little LONGER.
         And sit and watch the dying of the light inside my HAND.

To Love--
              The world no longer matters and the gloves come OFF;
Eyes stand wide and the truth comes OUT;
                        Everything found is now lost and those lost are now FOUND
In your arms, I must remain and be eternally SPELLBOUND.
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Author's Comments

I actually wanted to write an angry poem...
but then it turned out to be a wanting poem...
Because damn it...
if he could only see...
he brings out the best in me.


Ah well...


Anyway it is something new...

-shrugs-

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:icondreamerzsonata7:
The flow is interesting but it feels like it stops after every capped word. Maybe if they were italisised (correct spelling?) instead it might help. It is very well written besides that.
The 3rd stanza is amazing I just love your choice of words. Jawdropping stuff right there!

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"Lassiez le bon temps rouler!"
:iconlovemeethate:
I like the way you wrote this. (:
it's different and unique.
you're quite skilled. :D


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The illusion is that you are simply reading this poem.
The reality is that this is more than a poem. -Bukowski
:iconhylianinja:
The best and worst in you it seems...

I think that's what the ones we love the most do; they drive us mad. :D

I love this poem. :heart:
:icondiamondgirlfl:
a wonderful piece...full of strong feelings.

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"It's all make believe, isn't it?"
--Marilyn Monroe
:iconmoogleybacon:
:clap:

Brilliant, Cassy, absolutely brilliant. Such raw emotion... the caps are a nice touch, though I agree sometimes they disrupt the flow of it. I think it'd either be better italicized or if it all ended in caps--the couple sentences that didn't were the flow-disrupters for me.

Other than that small thing, it's absolute genius. <3

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...'cause you caught me off guard
now I'm runnin' and screamin'...
:iconleonlinnea:
I loved the imagery and tone within the words, and even though you said it was more of a poem that sounded of desire, I only caught that within the last couple of stanzas. I believe within the first two it sounded like what you wanted, which is an angry voice, because in the beginning it did sound like you were declaring something and trying to make it heard.
:icontalyessin:
Och, Cassy, so very, very powerful. Aside from one line, I could have spoken those words my self. :hug:

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I am d'Artagnan in The Disney Directory's Character Claimers' Crew
:iconannafisha:
wow I like it..full of emotions and creative..It's great as always :D

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Poetry is a journey of emotions..For they are sailed in the ocean of words..
:iconmutedillusion:
I can ridiculously relate to this.
I think everyone can.
It's what makes your writing wonderful,
it's that its always a consistent universal theme.
As always, I loved it and will always read what you have to write. :)

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