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I fell in love once, on a cloud,
though in the East, they call it fog
and in the west, they call it smog,
but when you are in love, you call it anything really,
it doesn't matter much at all.

We ate food on a stick, not in a restaurant,
but in a park, by a lake, with trees and frogs,
singing of true nature and not being serenaded
by violins and bad singers, who pull at your sleeves
and try to get you to dance.

Minutes passed into hours, and hours turned into boats
that we paddled across the lake, arguing about how mustard
isn't appreciated as much as ketchup, though ketchup
goes better with everything, in my opinion, but it's not so much
the conversation-but the fact we could have such a conversation.


I knew then, I was in love.
You can tell when your heart starts racing,
like it's drumming feet against your chest, keeping time,
to a world full of music heard only in the mind, and
your palms get sweaty like it got 90 degrees outside.

I knew I was in love.

Yet sometimes we forget
the times when food on a stick was enough,
and silly arguments now have undertones about more important things in life
(like suddenly I have become the ketchup overshadowing his mustard).
We drift apart. We see other people. We say goodbye.

He's on hiking trips in Hawaii
and I'm cleaning dirty dishes in New York City,
wondering why I let him go
while he probably is not thinking at all
about the one time we fell in love on a cloud.
2nd poem that was entered into the Grady's.

Fitting for Valentine's day--sorta.
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ImitatingLight333 Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2011
ok, you're just brilliant!
Can I write like you when I grow up? Pleeeeeeeease??
xxorpheusxx Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
Its a cute story, you have great imagery and I love it =]
HoneyValentine Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2010
i can totally relate to that piece. especially for valentines day...

it was a great piece, you can picture every detail
xShiori Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
very relatable. very wonderful. :heart:
La-Esperantistino Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2010
Aw, that's really sweet :)
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